Below is a story by Echo. You must develop the story and rewrite it. The best three stories will win three great prizes!
Best of luck!
Reza
Story by Echo (441)
I already read it last quarter in the textbook .
But , I was excited about this story , so I want to tell you .
In this story , someone went to rock mountain far from the village .
He drove his car and stopped .
After he walked alone to the mountain , he started climbing the mountain .
Suddenly , he dropped before he didn't move .
Because a huge rock held his right arm .
Finally , he cut his arm at his elbow .
I was surprised when I read this story .
He is still alive .
He chose to cut his arm off .
In addition , he was in the bab condition , but he chose the best way!
If I were him , I would be shocked too much and cry all day .
I was impressed by him very much .
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Cut the Arm to Live
In this story, Momo went to rock mountain far from the village, Riverside. He arrived at entrance of rock mountain after he drove his car for long time. After that, he walked alone to the mountain and he started to climb the mountain.
A huge rock fell down suddenly when he was climbing the mountain, and then his right arm was trapped by the rock and he fainted for long time. In a few time, when he woke up, he notified that he was trapped by the rock, and he tried to escape, but he couldn't. And he yelled, but nobody was there. The weather was getting cold. He didn't want to die, so he decided to cut off his arm to survive. He took out a knife from his sack, and then he started to cut his arm. It was so painful. After he cut off his arm, he ran to find help. In a couple time, he found some family camping in mountain. They took him to the hospital. He was treated there. Consequently, he could live. Now he is alive.
Cut the Arm to Live
In this story, Momo went to rock mountain far from the village, Riverside. he arrived at entrance of rock mountain after he drove his car for long time. After that, he walked alone to the mountain and he started to climb the mountain.
A huge rock fell down suddenly when he was climbing the mountain, and then his right arm was trapped by the rock and he fainted for long time. In a few time, when he woke up, he notified that he was trapped by the rock, and he tried to escape, but he couldn't. And he yelled, but nobody was there. The weather was getting cold. He didn't want to die, so he decided to cut off his arm to survive. He took out a knife from his sack, and then he started to cut his arm. It was so painful. After he cut off his arm, he ran to find help. In a couple time, he found some family camping in mountain. They took him to the hospital. He was treated there. Consequently, he could live. Now he is alive
Chifer's essay is very good!
Few years has past; however I still remember that story! Mohammed went to mountain which is far from the village where. He drove his car to the mountain and stopped closed to the mountain. After he walked alone to the mountain, and then he started climbing the mountain.
When he was climbing, suddenly he fell and he could not move .Because a huge rock held his right arm. He tried every way for help but he failed .Finally, he had to cut his right arm at his elbow.
I was so surprised when I read this story. In addition Mohammed is still alive.
He chooses to cut off his right arm. At the moment, he was in a bad condition, but I think he choose the best way to survive!
If I were him, I would be shocked much and kept crying all days. Until today I'm impressed by him very much!
Henry and Shirley
To survive
Last year, Phil went to Rock Mountain far From Riverside. He drove his car and stopped in parking. After he walked alone to mountain, he started climbing a large rock. Suddenly, when he was climbing, huge rock dropped in his right arm. So he could not move his arm, he was stuck. Phil was waiting for people to help him, but no one was over there. At night, the weather became colder and freezing, and he worked to free himself. Next day he was thinking about his family and friends, and he did not know what he had to do. At that time, he could not feel his arm. His arm was numb. Then he decided to cut his arm off in order to survive. First, he forced his arm against the rock to break it. Next, Phil applied a tourniquet his arm, and used his knife to cut off his right arm below the elbow. It was hard for him to cut it. Since that time, his friends and family were looking for him because he did not answer his phone and his did not show up. So they called authorities to look for him. When they found him, he rescued himself.
I was surprised when I read this story. He is still alive, and he enjoys his life like a normal people. But he gave people experience to not go climbing alone. However, he chose to cut his arm off. In addition, he was in bad condition, but he chose the best way!
If I were him, I would be shocked too much, cry all day and I did not know what I have to do. I was impressed by him very much.
A tragic accident in the mountain
One day Masaya and his best friend John decided to go to Rock Mountain far from the village to looking for news adventures. They had all the necessary things to their trip: water, foods, tools to climb the mountain, medicines, etc. They traveled five hours until that they found a little town close to the mountain. It was raining and John wanted to rest in the town because was very tired, but Masaya was decided to climb the mountain in these conditions. John tried to convince to his friend that the mountain was very dangerous and that best option was to go the next day, but Masaya was a arrogant fellow and didn’t listen the advices of John.
Masaya got out the bag of the car and started to walk alone to the mountain. It was raining very strong and he stood under a tree. It was dark and Masaya listened a noise between the trees. He lighted the lantern and saw a big snake. Masaya was very scare and started to run by the mountain. Unfortunately, Masaya drooped and couldn’t move because a huge rock held his right arm. He tried to take out the rock but was very heavy, his efforts to liberate were in vain in the end he slept. The next day, he again tried to take out the rock of his arm, but he didn’t have forces. He saw that his bag was very close of him and to brought it toward him with the help of his feet. He found a knife in the bag and with tears in his eyes he cut his arm at his elbow. The pain was too strong that he fainted.
John was very preoccupied for his friend, he and other people to left to search him. When they found him, John ran to hug to Masaya and both cried bitterly. Masaya was taken to the best hospital and he recuperated very fast. Masaya and John continued to be the best friends.
I was surprised when I read this story. Masaya is still alive. He chose to cut his arm off. In addition, he was in a bad condition, but he chose the best way. In contrast I would be crying all the time and shouting for require help. I really was impressed by him very much.
Several people jointed to visit the Colorado Mountain every fall. This people usually climb the mountain in groups, because they like to enjoy their partners company, and also make groups for explore unknown places that can be dangerous.
But Echo, like always, was late on their meeting before they started to climb the mountain. However, she drove alone and she tried to climb the mountain by herself.
She was so hurry to see the rest of the team and she was hard climbing the mountain for 2 hours alone. The day was almost done and it was so hard to have a clear view that he need to turn on a small light hand, but she dropped by accident. When she tried to get it back again he sliced over the snow and a rock held her right arm.
She had been having a lot of pain during long and decided to wait anybody’s help, but all help were so far.
3 hours later, her arm stared to turn blue, and she had being loosing too much blood.
6 hours ago the problem got worst, and her arms got so infected that she decided to hurry cut her arm until her elbow.
She expended the hardest time in her life ever. She was in bad condition, but she chose the best way.
After 2 days, while Echo was sleeping into a little cave, one guy sliced down too by accident and found Echo's body. She looked death and this man ran to find some quick help.
Although, Doctor said “not everybody its so strong for still alive in that way”.
So Echo is an example for people now, and she keeps living like always did.
Something can’t kill me, definitely you’ll stronger.
Mark was really serious because he was bad stalker to one of his friends. One day, he really wanted to meet her, Candy. At a hill for hanging out, But she refused his requirement. He missed too much her, so he had better meet her at that time. Then he went around her house. He started waiting in front of her house gate. He was so exited because he would be able to meet her 4 hours later. Finally she came back home and saw him in front of the gate. He wanted to her to know his effort, so he told her.
“I had been waiting for you for 4 hours here. It had been so cold, but it hadn’t matter, If I can meet you, see you, hear you.”
She was really scared because he was not her lover even just friend. In fact, Mark didn’t know about Candy at all. He needed to get her cell phone number to keep in touch with her, so he asked school-officer-assistant to get her cell phone number. And then he lied to officer. He told him.
“She is my first lover, but she went another country 3 years ago without any saying, but I saw her at cafeteria yesterday. Then she was disappeared. I really miss her. You know first love is really important. Please would you give me her cell phone number?”
Then the officer was really impressed, so she gave him her personal information. When he called her first time, he didn’t use his cell phone and used public telephone booth for hiding his exist. First time he was so shy and needed to check her reactions.
After calling many times, he found a way to make appointment with her. Before he joined his high school graduation reunion, he checked his graduation photo album. That’s a coincidence for him to see her picture in the album. That’s so! She was the same school student as him. Later, he called her. And he told her.
“yeah~. Hey I’m glad to talk with you. Do you remember me? Me… Mark!! I went to the same school as you and we were the same grade in our high school.”
Candy was embarrassed. It was first time to be called by stranger. She didn’t have any choice. She had to say hello to Mark. He called her again a week later, and told her.
“I’m waiting for you in the main gate of our university.”
She didn’t want to meet him, he was just stranger, but she was really wondering who he is, so she approved him and then…..
Ps : that’ story is kind of long. I want to finish, but it’s difficult. Anyway, Finally Mark was failed to get love. And then he was sick, considered about his personality and stalking. He couldn’t stand it, so he wanted to die. But when he was falling down, he thought that life is really beautiful. And then he tried to live again.
Thank you!
In this story, a man, Chris,went to Rocky mountain far from the Riverside on his summer vacation.
He drove his car and stopped. After he walked alone to the mountain without his cell phone. Because he wanted to have time alone, so he didn't tell anybody about his vacation.
He started climbing at the mountain. While he was climbing, he felt pleasure. A few minutes later, he fell down with big rock and then he felt furious pain. The big rock was pressing his right arm. He couldn't move. He thought what he had. He has a little food, a jaket, a knife and etc. At the night, it started to be cold, so he wore the jaket but he wore short pants. Therefore, he felt intense cold. Next morning, he decided to cut off his arm because he thought only if he cut off his arm, he could be alive. Then he held the knife and he began cutting his arm. He was cutting it for one hour because the knife was small for fruit. After cutting it, he tied his arm and he began finding a person who could help him
from this nightmare. He had walked and walked again. After three hours, he heard a little bit of sound as if there were many people. Yes he was right. What he heard was true, there were many people to be able to help him. He shouted to them that helped me and then he was faint. When he woke up, he was in hospital without his right arm.
I forgot the title:
"Before a Rockstar" :)
Junko, Masaya, Yacenia
441
A brave man
One day, MASAYA went to rock mountain far from the village to looking for treasures. He had driven his car for 3 days. And stopped in front of the mountain, it was raining and he decided to take a rest. After that, he started climbing the mountain for a hour.
Suddenly, a big tiger attacked him and he dropped five meters before he did not move, because a huge rock held his right arm. He did not have something to eat and the pain in his arm was very strong. He was struggling to break free from a huge rock, but he couldn’t.
Then, he looked around, but he couldn’t find any one. He shouted for help many times. Soon, he felt maximum fatigue. He tried to use his cell phone, but it didn’t work. He was very disappointed. He stayed over at this situation. He was getting worse day by day. He felt thirsty and hunger. After 3 days, he thought that’s the end of my life. If I cut my arm, I can break this situation, he thought. And finally he cut his arm at his elbow by himself. He began to walk in the mountain and a man found him. MASAYA came back to his home.
I was surprised when I read this story. At first I couldn’t believe this story because I thought he must be die to bleed too much. But he is still alive. He chose to cut his arm off. In addition, he was in the bad condition. If he didn’t cut his arm off, his hunger must be reach worst and his fatigue too. If there is a bare possibility to live, he didn’t care about his arm. I think his choice was the best way!
If I was him, I would be shocked too much and cry all day long. I can’t stand to be alone. I think MASAYA is a man who has high courage. And I was impressed by him very much. I want call him “master of life”.
The story
In the story, Denny has joined the rack mountain club. So, he made an activity three years ago. He has driven his car to the mountain many times and then he arrives to mountain place. After then, he walked alone to the mountain and started climbed the mountain.
When he was climbing, he heard some voice, and then he knew some situation will be happen. He was so nervous. So, he dropped before he didn’t move. That is, a huge rock held his right arm when he was falling down. He only thought about one thing. He wanted to survival. He really wants to see his family again. The rock has been pressed his arm for six hours. He can’t wait to long time. So, he tried to rescue. He tried to save himself. So, he started to move his arm and get out from the rock. Finally, he cut his arm at this elbow.
I read the story I was so surprised, because, I am also a climber. I knew the news three years ago. We met in the club lobby. I was surprised when I read this story. He is still alive. He has worked in the club. Denny is also my coach. I am very interest in about the story. “Why did you choose to cut your arm at this hard time?” I asked. In fact, during the time, only one opinion supported to me that is my family. Because, nobody knew I was climbing by myself. Denny said. He told that is a best way to help him to survival.
Nobody wants to meet the accident just like me. Denny said. I told to Denny “If I were you, I would be shocked too much and cried all day”. Denny has been a good climber in this club. Now, he teaches all of the skills and knowledge for us, because he can face his life and solve many problems. He is a great man. I proud of him.
Get ready before anything
One day, Steve went to rock mountain and he is smart and young man and he likes sports very much and his favorite hobbies is climb mountain .First, On day he was tired a little bit so he went to the mountain as usual .Second, he tried to reached the top but, he could not because he filled down and he can't remove. The big rock held his right arm and he's stick, and no body can move the huge rock. In addiction, he was alone and his phone was on the car but he takes with him only bottle of water and knife. Then, he feels thirsty and he need to drink water a lot of water but the water is gone and he has only knife and he still think for the best way haw he can still alive and what should he do and he was in a bad condition. Finally, he shout " Help , Help " but no body heard him beause he was alone and he think he should to give up or not. So, he chose the best way haw he can go out, or remove the huge rock so he chose the last chance after he try everything but he could not. Steve, was already injure him self .Moreover, he took out his knife and he count one through five and he start cutting his right arm until he cut it.Then, a lot of blood started flowing when he saw the blood he lost consciousness for a while after he get up he takes his arm with him because his hand was damage and he can't put it together. However, after he feels great Steve went to climb the mountain with only one hand but in this time he takes with him his phone, bottle of water and First aid. Also, he want many times after he feels good, so now all the people know about Steve and his bad story and he is really Self-reliance and also he was smart and clever he did not give up from the first time he give up after he think about a lot of things .In conclusion, until now Steve still go to the Olympic to show them his dangers hobbies.
There was a very wisdom man has lived in small and peacefull village. He hate the dirty and unfair world. However, he is a very genius scholar. Anyway anyone who lives in that village didn't know his name because he never said his real name. But, he usually wore blue clothes, so people told him to "Bluepang". Bluepang was very kind and silent person whenever he saw some beggars, he gave some money in silence.
someday, he went to rock mountain to exersice and study. he drove his car and stopped in front of the mountain. After he walked alone to the mountain, he started climbing the mountain.
meanwhile he was climbing the mountain, suddenly he found a child who is almost slipping down the cliff. So, he ran to the child and rescued. At this moment, the cliff was starting to crack. He was thunderstruck and wanted to get out there. But, It's too late. So he pushed a child up to the cliff from behind and dropped. After that, a huge rock held his right arm. Although he felt painful, he thought how he can alive. Luckily, he found a steal stick next to his foot. He took that and use a "Law of lever". using his foot and left arm. It was not too easy, but finally he removed the rock and alived.
One day, San went to rack mountain. At morning he left his home and he drove his car to go to mountain. And then, he started climbing. At noontime he climbed half of mountain, he took a rest, and ate lunch, and then started climbed again. He was already tired to climbed mountain. When he was climbing, he couldn’t step his leg on the rack, so he felt down from almost top of mountain. And then, he lost consciousness couple hour. After he woke up, it was very dark and cold and he couldn’t move his body because big rack was on his arm. He realized what if he didn’t want to die; he had to cut his arm. But, he afraid of cut his arm off. He thought couple minute and he decided cut his arm off. After he cut his arm off, his all of body was so hurt and he almost lost his consciousness again, so he tired to climb down long way. After he arrived on the road, no car was in there because time was too late. And then, he lost his consciousness again on the road. Next morning, when some family went to the travel, one kid find Sam, and kid said some guy died on the road, so the father stopped car and went to the Sam to make sure he is ok or not. When father called Sam, he opened his eyes, but after he opened his eyes he lost consciousness again. After that, that family took him to go to hospital, and then Sam woke up after 2 weeks. He lost his one arm, but he didn’t die, so he was very appreciated to that family.
To many choice in someone’s life
By 442 Lan and Jay
A man whose name is Tom. He lives in Riverside and just graduated from the university. One day he went to Rock Mountain far from the village. He likes climbing very much and this mountain is the one of the most difficult to climb. He drove his car and stopped because there is no road lead to the mountain, so he has to walk to the mountain; it took him an hour to walk to the mountain. Finally, after he walked alone to the mountain, he started climbing the mountain.
When he started to climbing, something happened, he felt a little shake on the ground, at this moment, there were many rocks fell down from the top of mountain, Tom started to run out there. Unfortunately, a huge rock hit him and held his right arm let him coma. Several minutes later he waked up; his right arm was very hurt, he used his left hand to pick up his cell phone and want to call 911, but cell phone displayed out of service. There was no person here, he was bleeding too much, and times tell him he must make a decision, if not he will be dead.
He took out a knife and exerted himself cut his arm, and then tied the right arm with the clothes. He is very angry because the rock let him lose one arm, so he use his left arm pick up that rock and threw into the river. After he lost right arm, he feels unhappy, but God bless him, he won 30 billion from big lot and start his different new life, although he just only one arm, he has the better life.
Written by Lin and Nicole (442)
“Chicken” Reza
Reza, a UCR student, is afraid to talk to girls. Due to this reason, all of his classmates laughed at him and called him "Chicken". He hated this nickname and tried to get rid of it. So he needs to do something to prove his courage. He has made a decision to climb the mountain where nobody has ever occupied. He went to rock mountain far from the village. He drove his car and stopped. After he walked alone to the mountain, he started climbing the mountain.
He hasn't had any plan and just brought the map. When he found out that he lost his way. He had no idea of which way he could go. He kept going ahead and looked at the map. Suddenly, He dropped before he didn't move. He had fainted for a long time when he came to life. He found he can't move body because a huge rock held his right arm. He lost a lot of bleed. At the same time, he thought if he couldn't move, he would die. The time was hurry for him. He wasn't sure if somebody would find him or not. He must to do something for himself. So he made a decision. Finally, he cut his arm at his elbow. And he was running to the village to find assistance. Before he fainted again, a farmer saw him and took him to hospital.
After a long period of hospitalization, he recovered his health. In generally, it is very hard to live in this situation. I was surprised when I read this story. He has been being still alive.
He chose to cut his arm off. How brave he was. He was in a bad condition, but he chose the best way.
I saw him one time, he said " Don't do anything without considering carefully" to children. If I were him, I would be shocked too much and cried all day. I was impressed by him very much.
(Chen and Koon 442 )
A long time ago. Old man was live in the small village. He was a widower and also still alone for 10 years in his house. He never goes outside to find new life. One day, a pretty girl drove a car to the mountain. She wanted meeting her friends for extreme sports but her car broke down in front of the old man house.
First time, when old man saw her, he fell in love with her. The pretty girl invited an old man went to the mountain. After that, the old man picked up her to the mountain. They reached the mountain. They tried to climb over the top of the mountain. However, she wanted to climb with her friends. And then, she was leaving old man along. The old man fell badly and he decided to climb the mountain by himself. When he was climbing, the huge rock moved and trapped his right arm. He tried to chip away at the rock. He was still trapped a few day and his food and water were gone. He doesn’t want to die in the mountain so he thinks about the future. He wants to see the future wife that he had to free himself. He had cut his arm off in order to survive. He used his knife to cut off his right arm below the elbow. He very exhausted but he needs climb to the ground. When he arrived to ground he met the pretty girl. The girl very worries about him because she didn’t go with him on the mountain.
Finally, they called the ambulance to help him. The man has been staying the hospital almost 6 month together with her. They remember the story that they do and get marry.
Jack’ hobby is climbing on mountains. One day, he was climbing by himself, because their climber friends had plans each other. Climbing by himself was the first time, but he had confidence, because he thought he have gathered enough experiment. First, his climbing was smooth, but the weather gradually became bad on mountain of middle. It started to rain and thunder. But, he kept climbing, and he barely climbed top of the mountain. He started to get down after break. The weather was much worse. Then, thunder cut down the huge tree by him, and the tree dropped toward him. He tried to avoid the tree, but he couldn’t avoid the tree, because it was too huge tree to avoid. The tree dropped his left hand, and he blacked out for one hour. When he woke up, his left hand had changed black, because his blood gathered his left hand. He couldn’t feel sensation of left hand. He tried to pull his left hand, but it was impossible to fit in the tree. He decided to die and his ever memory ran in his brain like phantasmagoria, and he started to think about future. He wanted to become Japanese teacher, and have his family. He had a lot thing which he wants to do, so he though he couldn’t die. And, he cut his left hand by himself. A lot of blood changed his white T-shirt to red. But, he didn’t feel injured, and he started got down. When he noticed, he had slept on the bed. So, he was helped by climber. He lost his left hand, but he got great future. Now, he became Japanese teacher, and married with beautiful girl.
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